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How to punctuate dialogue

Abbie Rutherford • 7 October 2022

How difficult can punctuating dialogue be? You simply follow the same set of grammar rules but with added quotation marks, right?

 

Well, not quite.


But still, rules such as not capitalising the initlal letter of the word following a comma (with the exception of proper nouns) still apply, don’t they? 


No, which is why a lot of authors find setting out dialogue so confusing.


Thorin the corgi’s expression in the photo below pretty much sums up how most writers feel about the punctuation of dialogue.

So, I thought a brief guide may help. 


I’m not going to go into the whys as I want to produce something that can be followed as you write. A simple reference tool. Of course, your editor and proofreader can assure that you get it right, but it’s always nice to know how to do something yourself too, I think.


Your editor may tell you to insert a dialogue tag or an action beat, but what exactly are they and how do they differ? 

Both alert the reader to who is speaking, but in slightly different ways. As its name suggests, the ‘dialogue tag’ tags the character to their speech. Most commonly and simplistically this takes the form of ‘James said’, but can also be used to describe how the dialogue is spoken while still identifying the character – ‘he shouted’, ‘Jo whispered’, for example.


An action beat still serves to indicate who is speaking but includes an action (this can be a physical action, a thought or a description), and they can come at the start, in the middle or at the end of a piece of dialogue. Action beats are a useful way of expressing the emotion behind the dialogue without having to directly say it, and can make the prose more interesting, as follows:


James threw the cup against the wall. ‘I’m always the one who has to make cups of tea.’


We can see James is saying this in anger without having to use a dialogue tag such as ‘he said, angrily’.

Now we know what they are, let’s break this down further and look at how we punctuate them.


Dialogue tags


The tag comes after the dialogue:  It always follows a comma not a full point, and the first letter of the tag should be lower case unless it’s a proper noun.


‘I’m going to make a cup of tea,’ he said.


The tag comes before the dialogue:  It ends with a comma and the first word that follows takes a capital letter (this is where a lot of people get confused).


James said, ‘Do you want a cup of tea?’


The tag appears in the middle of a piece of dialogue and interjects two complete sentences: The tag follows a comma and ends with a full point.


‘I’m going to make a cup of tea,’ he said. ‘I’ll bring the biscuits in too.’ 


As you can see, the following sentence of dialogue starts with a capital.


The tag breaks up an incomplete sentence: The tag is ended with a comma and the following sentence is not capitalised (unless it starts with a name).


‘I’m going into the kitchen,’ he said, ‘to make a cup of tea.’


A question or exclamation mark is used to end the dialogue: We have to go against what comes naturally here, as neither mark act in the same manner as a full point when they punctuate dialogue that is followed by a tag. The tag dies not take a capital (unless it’s a proper noun), going against what we have all been taught. 


‘Are you making a cup of tea?’ he asked.


‘I always have to make the tea!’ shouted James.


Action beats


The action beat comes before the dialogue: End it with a full point and start the following piece of speech with a capital letter. Unlike the dialogue tag, the action beat is dealt with as a complete sentence.


James walked over to the kettle. ‘I’m going to make a cup of tea.’


Action beat used in the middle of dialogue: Again, treat it as a complete sentence and end it with a full point.


‘I’m going to make a cup of tea.’ James walked over to the kettle. ‘Do you want one?’


It is fairly easy to remember once you get your head around it, I promise. I really enjoy editing and proofreading dialogue, but then I am a bit strange!



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